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不可不知:新托福写作11种常见错误分析

       六. 指代不清(Ambiguous Reference of Pronouns)

       指代不清主要讲的是代词与被指代的人或物关系不清,或者先后所用的代词不一致。试看下面这一句:

       Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to be her bridesmaid.

       (玛丽和我姐姐很要好,因为她要她做她的伴娘。)

       读完上面这一句话,读者无法明确地判断两位姑娘中谁将结婚,谁将当伴娘。如果我们把易于引起误解的代词的所指对象加以明确,意思就一目了然了。这个句子可改为:

       Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to be her bridesmaid.

       例1. And we can also know the society by serving it yourself.

       剖析:句中人称代词we和反身代词yourself指代不一致。

       改为:We can also know society by serving it ourselves.

       七. 不间断句子(Run-on Sentences)

       什么叫run-on sentence?请看下面的例句:

       例1. There are many ways we get to know the outside world.

       剖析:这个句子包含了两层完整的意思:"There are many ways." 以及"We get to know the outside world."。简单地把它们连在一起就不妥当了。

       改为:There are many ways for us to learn about the outside world. 或:There are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world.

       八. 措词毛病(Troubles in Diction)

       Diction是指在特定的句子中如何适当地选用词语的问题。囿于教学时间紧迫,教师平时在这方面花的时间往往极其有限,影响了学生在写作中没有养成良好的推敲、斟酌的习惯。他们往往随心所欲,拿来就用,所以作文中用词不当的错误比比皆是。

       例1. The increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution.

       (农业方面化学物质使用的不断增加也造成了污染。)

       剖析:显然,考生把obstacles“障碍”,“障碍物”误作substance“物质”了。另外“the increasing use(不断增加的使用)” 应改为“abusive use(滥用)”。

       改为:The abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution.

       九. 累赘(Redundancy)

       言以简洁为贵。写句子没有一个多余的词;写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组;能用词组的不用从句或句子。如:

       In spite of the fact that he is lazy, I like him.

       本句的"the fact that he is lazy"系同谓语从句,我们按照上述“能用词组的不用从句”可以改为:In spite of his laziness, I like him.

       例1. For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.

       剖析:整个句子可以大大简化。

       改为:Diligent, caring people use money only to buy what they need.

       十. 不连贯(Incoherence)

       不连贯是指一个句子前言不对后语,或是结构上不畅通,这也是考生常犯的毛病。

       例1. The fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth.

       剖析:The fresh water与逗号后的it不连贯;It 与things在数方面不一致。

       改为:Fresh water is the most important thing in the world.

       十一. 综合性语言错误(Comprehensive Misusage)

       所谓“综合性语言错误”,是指除了上述十种错误以外,还有诸如时态、语态、标点符号、大小写等方面的错误。

       例1. Today, Money to everybody is very importance, our's eat, cloth, live, go etc.

       (来源:无忧托福网)

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